Rhetorical Analysis

The mistakes in my Analysis essay can be fixed very easily and with time. Basically all it is just grammer and structuring, also some punctuation errors. Just little things here and there and my paper would have been grader better. Some of it was putting in or leaving minor things out of the paper that should have or not have been in my paper. The main one was citing the page number, I put it in where it should not have been, and left it out where it was needed: (185) or not in at all. Another thing that I can fix is the connection of the writing with ethos, logos, pathos and the use of the rhetorical triangle in the paper. I also have to keep my personal opinons out of it and keep my mind on the assignment. I have to keep an eye out for sentence fragments so that i do not get points taken off from the final grade. So its just minor little things here and there and i will take the time to fix them and get a better grade.

Synthesis

The Banking Concept of Education by Paulo Freire and The Allegory of the Cave from The Republic, BookVII by Plato make very good points for being written hundreds to thousands of years apart. The way Plato taught was when ever one of his students made a comment or gave an answer, he would challenge it to make them think and to have the student suppost what they said with facts. Some teachers in today's society do not do this because they do not want to hurt the students feelings by challenging what they said. Paulo points out ten teaching ideals that were or are still in practice, these ideals shape an image that the student is a mindless robot that should do as told to do, nothing good can come from this way of teaching. Plato would have open disscusions to MAKE his students think, discuss, and present different ideas and methods. Yet despite their differences, poth pieces share some common themes. They both show how if a teacher is willing to be open to their students and if the students are willing to open their minds to different ways of thinking, then anything is possible.

PADI: Professional Association of Diving Instructors

This site to me is not just another scuba diving site, its a site that shows that any one can do it. The logos is well done in my opinon, when you open the site you see a person with a mask, fins, snorkel, and a "toy"(for us scuba divers) but it is a underwater hand held propeller. The women is surrounded by 3 dolphins. To the left of the screen there are the language selections so people of other nations may read it with ease. The pathos is one heck of a hit, the fact that three dolphins are playfully swimming around a person in their natural habitat. Also the water is extremely clear and clean which adds to the pathos. Ethos, well PADI is a world wide suba diving company. All scuba divers have PADI certification cards which is needed to do alot of the dives so that the dive master and others know that you have been trained and certified to a certain level of diver. So I feel that this site has some of the best visual and other factors that add to its beauty.

Mother Tongue

Amy Tan's piece called "Mother Tongue" focuses on what it was like writing and learning english when her mother only spoke Chinese. Some of you may know of Amy Tan by her book "The Joy Luck Club". I think that she is trying to reach out people that lived in one nation then moved to a completely new nation and had to learn the native language to assilate into the nation and to get around with no problems. Even though some people do learn and get around people do not treat them right just because they are from a different country. We need to treat those from another country as if they were from the the country that we live in so that they feel like the are at home. This piece may also be aimed at parents that are to entrenched with the lives they had and are unwilling to change to a new life. Some parents fear change and would fight like there is no tomorrow to keep their lives the same.

Blogs: What they could and should be

A blog should be a way to share information in a logical mannor. So when we respnd to each others blogs we should try to respond in a polite mannor. Blogs should also be a fun expiriance for all of us. Any how uses profanity or any other inpolite words should be banned from blogging and forced to miss the points that these blogs are. So I ask you to be nice when posting on my page, please be nice and I will be nice to your pages when I am posting on your pages. So thats what I think what a blog could and should be in the academic world and in the world out side the academic world. So bring on your posting and lets try to have a grown up discussions and tyr not to hurt feelings and or kill each other over these blogs and lets have a great year. I will be adding more to may page so you can get a better idea on who I am and where I come from.